1. Does the draft have a main point (thesis)?
yes it does, "As a result of this carelessness, the people of La Paz will need to find alternative ways of getting their water supply to survive and live out their normal daily lives" or at least i think that is the thesis....
2. Find an instance of what you consider an interesting or useful example, image, chart, etc. and explain why
OK what i like the best about his research paper is the interview. I think that is a great source of information and something really interesting to use.
El Diario reporter: Can you tell us your thoughts on the melting of Chacaltaya?
Celia Ramon: Many people here who live around the capital city of La Paz
depend on the glacier for their water supply. Although I don’t
really know too much about all this global warming stuff, I do
know that something terrible is happening to our environment.
El Diario reporter: How is it that you get water for daily living?
Celia Ramon: Well, the water from the glaciers flows down the mountain via
canals (rivers) and into water treatment plants which supplies my
home with fresh water. I don’t have any plumbing in my home so
my husband Pedro built a makeshift hole in the ground for water
to flow into my home.
El Diario reporter: What will you do when Chacaltaya melts completely?
Celia Ramon: My husband Pedro thinks we will need to travel almost an hour
outside of La Paz in order to get water. It would not be such a
problem if it was for drinking alone, but we need plenty of water
for the farm, for our food, for showering, washing dishes and
many other reasons like for the animals. O my God, the animals.
I almost forgot about all the animals. No, no, it’s just too much . water for my husband to travel for and bring back here to us.
El Diario reporter: So what will you do when there is finally no more water in the
rivers?
Celia Ramon: My husband says to pray that the large countries of this world
will help us smaller poor countries. He is not too sure, but he
thinks that all their technology and waste in the major contribute
to our problem.
El Diario reporter: Thank you Mrs. Ramon for your time.
Celia Ramon: Your very welcome. God bless you. Go in peace.
Celia Ramon: Many people here who live around the capital city of La Paz
depend on the glacier for their water supply. Although I don’t
really know too much about all this global warming stuff, I do
know that something terrible is happening to our environment.
El Diario reporter: How is it that you get water for daily living?
Celia Ramon: Well, the water from the glaciers flows down the mountain via
canals (rivers) and into water treatment plants which supplies my
home with fresh water. I don’t have any plumbing in my home so
my husband Pedro built a makeshift hole in the ground for water
to flow into my home.
El Diario reporter: What will you do when Chacaltaya melts completely?
Celia Ramon: My husband Pedro thinks we will need to travel almost an hour
outside of La Paz in order to get water. It would not be such a
problem if it was for drinking alone, but we need plenty of water
for the farm, for our food, for showering, washing dishes and
many other reasons like for the animals. O my God, the animals.
I almost forgot about all the animals. No, no, it’s just too much . water for my husband to travel for and bring back here to us.
El Diario reporter: So what will you do when there is finally no more water in the
rivers?
Celia Ramon: My husband says to pray that the large countries of this world
will help us smaller poor countries. He is not too sure, but he
thinks that all their technology and waste in the major contribute
to our problem.
El Diario reporter: Thank you Mrs. Ramon for your time.
Celia Ramon: Your very welcome. God bless you. Go in peace.
3.
Find a place in the paper that you consider confusing or boring and explain why
Find a place in the paper that you consider confusing or boring and explain why
So far i think that the paper is really interesting it gives a lot of information and is well organized
4. Does the draft acknowledge where information comes from IN THE BODY OF THE TEXT? yes it does
5.If the draft has a fictional "human interest story," discuss whether it is convincing/imaginative/detailed or forced/tedious/general. is all of the above i like the story that it has which is the interview which is really human
6. Would you recommend that the writer get some help with grammar before turning in the last draft? Why? Why not? well i am not a grammar expert but i think he has really good grammar
2 comments:
well, I'm not sure if we're supposed to do comments or not, but I just wanted to say that I agree that Jamie's interview really catches that "human" feel and doesn't sound scripted.
Even,the way the interviewee bids the reporter farewell is indeed true to Bolivian culture, " God Bless You. Go in Peace." It almost sounds like a translated interview.
The topic and paper sound really interesting. Good Luck on your paper!!
Jocelyn =)
Nancy, thanks so much for taking time to answer the questions in depth. Excellent observations!
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